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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
Haikus are supposed to be 5 7 5. You have 5 6 9 O.o
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hypnothalamus Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Professional General Artist
I tend to consider haikus those poems that feel like a haiku, so if the form differs a bit but it still resonates like one, then that's a haiku for me. and as the other person said, there are different forms of haiku, besides the traditional form that you mention (and it's about on's NOT syllabels). and modern haikus don't follow that norm, and don't follow the usual way of construction either. you can read about all that on wikipedia: [link]
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DeadlyHarvest Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Photographer
we should bond over poetry.... just saying.... :icondandyonionplz:
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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
Hm, well okay then; it's your poem.
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DeadlyHarvest Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Student Photographer
there are different forms of haiku. at least fifty that i know of. also it depends on the language.... the 5 7 5 rule is traditionally meant for on, not syllables... though I agree it could confuse those who are unaware of such facts. Sorry, my mother is an english professor. I tend to get protective of the literary form.
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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
Wow, I never knew that. I have no idea what you mean by "on" though.
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DeadlyHarvest Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Photographer
on is a combination of sounds. it makes up the japanese alphabet. such as ka, ki, ku, ko, and so forth. in japanese you write with sounds. take the name hikaru for example, it's made up of hi, ka, and ru. therefore instead of six letters there are three hirigana or characters. so if the haiku is written in japanese it is write with five on in the first line, seven in the second, and five in the last. Of course there are other ways to write the lines, but there are always three and the last must always end with a sharp word, something cutting compared to the rest of the words. They are traditionally about nature as well. Haiku is a very complex poetic form and that is why there are very few true masters. Though there are many modern day interpretations that don't use nature as their base, I've always been fond of tradition.  sorry for the lesson... i just REALLY love poetry. My mum was drilling me in it since I could crawl :iconrobotfaceplz: it's become automatic. 
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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
Whoa. That is amazing how you memorized that. I have nothing left to say anymore.
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DeadlyHarvest Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Photographer
lol thanks I suppose. It also helps that I happen to be obsessed with Japanese culture. :icononiononionplz:
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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013
Lol you're welcome. So it's a win-win for you :)
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DeadlyHarvest Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Photographer
i guess you could say that lol :icononionblushplz:
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DeadlyHarvest Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Photographer
written* >.< some english kid I am... 
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hypnothalamus Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Professional General Artist
thanks :)
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DeadlyHarvest Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Student Photographer
no prob.your work is amazing by the way :D
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selenawatershine Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
What this person said ^^
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hypnothalamus Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2013  Professional General Artist
it's still mostly wrong
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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
I'm glad someone agrees with me. I thought everyone would start bashing me, actually
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selenawatershine Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
Meh, I'm not the type to bash maliciously. More like, I do it through my own honest opinions and people get mad at me -_-;;
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LordofStupidity Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
We can't please everyone, I guess
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selenawatershine Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
I suppose not, no =)
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Lucky67 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is... poetic x)
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Andrelah Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful!
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forgotmypen Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha! Love it.
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LaughtonMcCry Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013  Student General Artist
provoking!
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