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A burning sunrise
The eyes catch fire
Wash my face in the pond
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KaizenKitty Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Student Writer
Morning fire
awakens me
new life
new breath
new skies
begin
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naikki Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
painting with words..beautiful..
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FluffyLover1986 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013
Why is this haiku
On the front page so easy
Really don't get it
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KaizenKitty Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2013  Student Writer
I don't know either
Keep working toward your goal
Life is not unfair
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lebatte Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's because the artist is popular because of his drawings (and for good reason; they're amazing). It's not exactly fair to people who are really good at poetry to be overlooked, but there's your answer.
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WingDiamond Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013
:iconbutt-headplz::iconsaysplz:We're gonna be exploring the world of getting "High" - Cool!
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MophisTea Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Is it bad that the line,"Eyes catch fire" makes me laugh?
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IronNarwhal Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
Not really, depending on how you think about it. 
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Eeren Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Beautiful! <3
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angelichope Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013
Lovely!:heart:
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LordAmmon Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Good but It doesn't follow the 5-7-5 of a Haiku
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hypnothalamus Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
modern haiku doesn't follow that rule either, read on wikipedia for more details
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lebatte Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Modern haiku style is full of shit. It's just a contribution (and maybe even a misunderstanding) from the anti-form crowd. There is no English equivalent better approximated to the Japanese "on" than the syllable. There's a very beautiful thing in sticking to the structure rather than going with the first thing that pops into your head, and that was one of the points of adhering to the haiku style in the first place.
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hypnothalamus Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Professional General Artist
it feels like a haiku to me, so I will leave it here... and I'm not going to get into a pointless and heated discussion about form
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lebatte Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's not pointless; this is what a lot of people study and live for. I don't mind that your haiku is not in form. I just don't think it's right that someone would make an appeal to authority about non-form being the preferred method. Just because it's a trend that people do it that way doesn't mean it's the correct way now.
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ValentinRaven Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
it has my humble approval
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ScottMan2th Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
momentary thoughts
silence broken delicately
plunking toads...ripples
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chriseastmids Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
love this
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